Tuesday's assignment:

Critique.

There's not much for me to say about this, I feel like he's the professional and so there probably shouldn't be very many things to critique, but i'll try.


Aren't we supposed to avoid starting an article off with a sentence? It was on the list for cliche leads.
Second, I could have done without the grandmother being frisked part. Not because it was a bad sentence, but because it's a rather unpleasant thought, haha.
Third, the first paragraph is ridiculously long, I don't know if that's the fault of the person that filed it on the website though. It lost me.
Next, what's the Air Travelers Association? Is that supposed to be common knowledge?
And what is a "blah" response? Also, is it right to assume that all people know what a blog is? If I didn't, I don't think I would have understood a single concept in this article.

As for multimedia wise, there was a picture along with the article. However, the picture was of a plane from 2007, while the article wasn't published until over 6 months later in 2008. Why wouldn't the editor choose a more up to date picture? Seems like that would have been possible figuring that was just taken from a file.